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H50 Ficlet: Hold On 1/1

November 24th, 2010 (09:34 am)

Title:  Hold On

Disclaimer:  Not mine.

A/N:  This is the next in my drabble series.  The prompt from hawaii_5_0_100  was nightmare, which dovetailed nicely into a Danny POV.  I’m leaning toward writing more in the coming weeks, because it still doesn’t seem complete as a series to me  :)

A/N 2:  Beta’ed by the wonderful moogsthewriter , who not only encourages my bunnies, but feeds them hyperactive carrots just to see what happens.  (And then I think she sits back and laughs gleefully, but since I try to do the same to her, I suppose I shouldn’t complain.)

Summary:  It’s a nightmare.

-o-

The Hardest Part series:
The Hardest Part
Equilibrium
The Big Picture
Hold On

-o-

It’s a nightmare.

An honest-to-God nightmare.  Worse than the thought of spending the rest of his life in Hawaii.  Worse than the thought of Rachel sharing a monstrosity of a bed with Stan.  Worse than the thought of Grace in a barely there bikini.  Worse than another day trailing behind Steve shoot-first-ask-questions-never McGarrett.

A nightmare.

Because he’s trapped, someplace dark and cold.  The space around him effuses into oblivion and he’s as tightly held in place as he is loosely floating away.  He doesn’t quite know where or when or how, but he sort of does, and if he could just focus long enough, he could figure it out.

He’s a detective, after all.

But he can’t.  Just like he can’t stop Rachel from leaving or stop Steve from running into a situation half-cocked.  Danny’s helpless and if it scares him, he’ll just throw his hands in the air and act like he never saw this coming.

Which is fitting, since he didn’t.  Danny remembers a bust and gunfire and pain...

It hurts.  It’s the only thing he’s certain of, a fire in his chest, threatening to swallow him whole.

Somewhere, he hears voices.  Kono’s rises and falls like the tide.  Chin’s comes in low and true.  Steve’s is loudest, which seems about right.  It resonates, and even if he can’t make out the words, Danny understands all the same.

Hold on, Danny.

Hold onto Kono, the cop she’ll become.  Hold onto Chin, the redemption he’s already earned.  Hold onto Grace, all the light she brings.  Hold onto Jersey, his disdain of Hawaii.  Hold onto his tie, his shoes, his minute knowledge of police code.  Hold onto Steve, the partner he wasn’t looking for but maybe needed.  Hold onto 5-0, the job he will never admit to liking but has changed him all the same.  Hold onto pain, cold, memories he can’t piece together.  Hold on.

Because this is the nightmare.  Not dying a painful death from preventable skin cancer, not Grace being whistled at by some horny surfer, not sand in his shoes and stuck between his toes.  But leaving it all too soon, too sudden.

Hold on, Steve says again, like the son of a bitch he is.  Some damn superman who can probably scale buildings in a single bound when Danny can’t even come out of a bust in one piece.  It’s an order, of course.  No room for argument, not that Danny won’t try.

Hold on, Danno. Not because Steve tells him, but because he needs to tell Steve what he can do with his orders.  He needs to tell them all what they can do with their sun, their sand, their damn laid back attitudes.  He needs to tell them what they can do with their surfboards, their pineapples, their brahs, the whole damn nine yards.  He needs them to know how bad this nightmare is and make sure they never forget.

Hold on, and Danny does.

Comments

Posted by: donutsweeper (donutsweeper)
Posted at: November 24th, 2010 06:06 pm (UTC)

oooh, excellent use of the prompt and great addition to the series!

Posted by: do i dare or do i dare? (faye_dartmouth)
Posted at: November 29th, 2010 03:41 pm (UTC)
danny ready

It was a fun prompt to work with :)

Thanks!

Posted by: Moogs (moogsthewriter)
Posted at: November 24th, 2010 06:07 pm (UTC)
H50 - Partners

*watering hyperactive carrots* Grow. Grow! You are a key part to my evil plans! Muahahahaha.

^________^

I mean... you didn't see anything. *waves hand* Nothing at all.

Seriously, though, if this is the kind of stuff I can prod you into writing or whatever, I approve. :D Because I loves it muchly and... and... and... we just need our H/C episode so I can see this onscreen, dang it!

That is all. ^_^

Posted by: do i dare or do i dare? (faye_dartmouth)
Posted at: November 29th, 2010 03:42 pm (UTC)
hawaii five-0

LOL. You have the best sinister plans ever.

You can probably prod me into writing anything. I am exceptionally easy, though I shouldn't probably admit that so easily.

Thanks :)

Posted by: mistress_shiny (la_vie_chanson)
Posted at: November 24th, 2010 11:20 pm (UTC)

Great work. I love this series.

Posted by: do i dare or do i dare? (faye_dartmouth)
Posted at: November 29th, 2010 03:42 pm (UTC)
chin

Thanks! I'm glad you're enjoying it.

Posted by: i want to cause a ruckus (geminigrl11)
Posted at: November 24th, 2010 11:23 pm (UTC)
Scott Caan

Per. Fection. Especially love: Hold onto Steve, the partner he wasn’t looking for but maybe needed. Hold onto 5-0, the job he will never admit to liking but has changed him all the same.

Posted by: do i dare or do i dare? (faye_dartmouth)
Posted at: November 29th, 2010 03:44 pm (UTC)
danny ambulance

The relationship between Danny and Steve leaves me all warm and fuzzy. I just smile contentedly all the time, and I'm thrilled that you enjoy it so much too :)

Thanks!

Posted by: lillyg (lillyg)
Posted at: November 25th, 2010 01:14 am (UTC)

Good job! ^^

Posted by: do i dare or do i dare? (faye_dartmouth)
Posted at: November 29th, 2010 03:44 pm (UTC)
danny and steve work together

Thanks so much :)

Posted by: sans_souci2 (sans_souci2)
Posted at: November 27th, 2010 06:23 pm (UTC)
pilot

perfect pacing -
loved this bit-
"Kono’s rises and falls like the tide. Chin’s comes in low and true. Steve’s is loudest, which seems about right."
great stuff!


Posted by: do i dare or do i dare? (faye_dartmouth)
Posted at: November 29th, 2010 03:44 pm (UTC)

I'm so glad it worked for you :) Thanks!

Posted by: sophie_deangirl (sophie_deangirl)
Posted at: December 7th, 2010 04:46 am (UTC)
Enjoyed this!

Great POV of Danny's and very moving. I found myself saying "Hold on" too. You captured his feelings perfectly.

My Fave part:

"Because this is the nightmare.  Not dying a painful death from preventable skin cancer, not Grace being whistled at by some horny surfer, not sand in his shoes and stuck between his toes.  But leaving it all too soon, too sudden."

Beautiful!

Posted by: do i dare or do i dare? (faye_dartmouth)
Posted at: December 22nd, 2010 03:09 pm (UTC)
Re: Enjoyed this!
danny steve walk

I'm perpetually playing catch up....

But I'm glad you've liked this series. It's been a lot of fun to write, actually. Doing drabbles helps my muse to keep going--plenty of h/c to be had without any long term commitments :)

Anyway thank you!

Posted by: purple_spock (purple_spock)
Posted at: December 22nd, 2010 07:42 pm (UTC)

This is so great too. These just keep getting better. The whole thing was really well done, and I loved how even though most of it is rather deep, Danny still took a moment to insult Steve's lack of planning, and how he acknowledges each one of his team mates in turn. On to the next one. : )

Posted by: do i dare or do i dare? (faye_dartmouth)
Posted at: December 23rd, 2010 01:44 pm (UTC)

I'm so glad you like them! And I like to think that Steve and Danny will always fall back on insults--it's instinct between them :) Thanks!

Posted by: mystizan (mystizan)
Posted at: August 23rd, 2011 02:05 am (UTC)
H5O: Danny needs a hug

Something this short should not leave a grin this big on my face. I love this as much as I loved part 3. What if these only keep getting better? :O

Posted by: do i dare or do i dare? (faye_dartmouth)
Posted at: August 24th, 2011 11:56 pm (UTC)
danny and steve work together

Aw, I'm so glad you've enjoyed these. That means a lot! Thanks :)

Posted by: mystizan (mystizan)
Posted at: August 25th, 2011 02:02 am (UTC)
Castle Mon

ur welcome :)

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