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Primeval drabble: Where the Heart Is

June 26th, 2012 (06:38 am)
exhausted

feeling: exhausted

Title: Where The Heart Is

Disclaimer: I do not own Primeval.

A/N: The prompt was the way to a man’s heart . Much thanks to lena7142 for the beta.

Warning: Canon character death!

Summary: Over the years, others tried finding his heart.



Stephen had been half in love with Helen from the start. Her passion overwhelmed him; her focus awed him. She found the way to his heart, then took it, playing with it before leaving it behind her like all the rest.

Over the years, others tried finding it. Allison dated him for years. Abby flirted with him even after his antics. They both looked but they couldn’t find it.

Stephen suspected no one could. So when the predator ripped open his chest, he was surprised to see the throbbing heart bleed out because it had been hidden there all along.

Comments

Posted by: reggietate (reggietate)
Posted at: June 26th, 2012 11:56 am (UTC)
circleofglass

*meeeeeeep!*

Brilliant and sad. Last line is a killer. *scuttles back to Denial*

Posted by: do i dare or do i dare? (faye_dartmouth)
Posted at: June 27th, 2012 02:06 pm (UTC)
stephen goodbye

Denial is a much happier place than canon.

Thanks!

Posted by: kristen_mara (kristen_mara)
Posted at: June 26th, 2012 12:30 pm (UTC)
Pensive


Shriiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiek

OK, you have used up your Death Card for the next three months with this one. Only happy ones for the next three months, got it?

The angst...

Posted by: do i dare or do i dare? (faye_dartmouth)
Posted at: June 27th, 2012 02:07 pm (UTC)
stephen cutter sit

Three months! That's a long time for my muse to stay happy. I had a pretty good run until this one, though, didn't I?

Thanks :)

Posted by: kristen_mara (kristen_mara)
Posted at: July 3rd, 2012 12:40 pm (UTC)
Pensive


Three months. Because you ended the 'good run' in such a graphic, unget-outable away. *pauses* Stephen was just having an nightmare, and Nick will now wake him up!

Posted by: do i dare or do i dare? (faye_dartmouth)
Posted at: July 4th, 2012 04:25 am (UTC)
stephen and cutter hot

LOL, yeah, a dream sequence would work. And just because his chest is ripped open, I suppose he might still live...it's unlikely, but maybe with some intervention from the future?

Yeah, okay, this one was pretty dark. I rewrote this like three times trying to find a fic worth sharing and this one was the darkest but the most readable.

Posted by: fredbassett (fredbassett)
Posted at: June 26th, 2012 01:49 pm (UTC)

Oh blimey, this really packs a punch!

Posted by: do i dare or do i dare? (faye_dartmouth)
Posted at: June 28th, 2012 03:45 am (UTC)
stephen skeptical

I'm glad it was effective! Thanks :)

Posted by: nietie (nietie)
Posted at: June 26th, 2012 03:01 pm (UTC)
Eek!

Eek! Awesome, vivid drabble. But EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEK!

Posted by: do i dare or do i dare? (faye_dartmouth)
Posted at: June 28th, 2012 03:46 am (UTC)
stephen shocked

I feel like I should apologize!

Thanks :)

Posted by: clea2011 (clea2011)
Posted at: June 26th, 2012 03:25 pm (UTC)
Stephen

That is brilliant. Tragic, but brilliant.

Posted by: do i dare or do i dare? (faye_dartmouth)
Posted at: June 28th, 2012 03:47 am (UTC)
stephen cutter

Stephen's story is almost always tragic. Thanks!

Posted by: knitekat (knitekat)
Posted at: June 26th, 2012 07:17 pm (UTC)

*eeek* Brilliantly done but No!!! *races back to Denial*

Posted by: do i dare or do i dare? (faye_dartmouth)
Posted at: June 28th, 2012 03:47 am (UTC)
stephen goodbye

I may have to join you there in Denial. It's rather sad here!

Thanks!

Posted by: Lena7142 (lena7142)
Posted at: June 26th, 2012 10:30 pm (UTC)
stephen

I'm relieved to see I'm not the only one who lost it reading this...

Beautiful. Reflective, and then suddenly brutal and heartbreaking (no pun intended) with that brilliant and devastating twist. I love the juxtaposition of the figurative and literal heart.

Posted by: do i dare or do i dare? (faye_dartmouth)
Posted at: June 28th, 2012 03:48 am (UTC)
stephen goodbye

I still am sorry for not warning you!

And thank you! I'm really glad the contrast worked in the end.

Posted by: she was a work in progress. (dreamer_98)
Posted at: June 27th, 2012 03:35 am (UTC)
billy collins

So angsty and sad. Poor Stephen. :(

Posted by: do i dare or do i dare? (faye_dartmouth)
Posted at: June 28th, 2012 03:48 am (UTC)
stephen hair

Poor Stephen, indeed :(

Thanks!

Posted by: lsellersfic (lsellersfic)
Posted at: June 27th, 2012 06:21 pm (UTC)
PriWriMo: Stephen

Meep! Packs a read punch that!

Posted by: do i dare or do i dare? (faye_dartmouth)
Posted at: June 28th, 2012 03:49 am (UTC)
stephen cutter distance

I'm glad you liked it! Thanks :)

Posted by: athene (deinonychus_1)
Posted at: July 1st, 2012 01:22 pm (UTC)
stephen

meeep! That last line was brutal, and a real surprise.

Posted by: do i dare or do i dare? (faye_dartmouth)
Posted at: July 5th, 2012 12:04 pm (UTC)
stephen cutter

I never mean for the fics to get quite so dark but my muse does what it will.

Thanks :)

Posted by: Cordelia Delayne (cordeliadelayne)
Posted at: July 3rd, 2012 11:42 pm (UTC)
[primeval] abby/connor

Eeek! That certainly was a dramatic ending!

Posted by: do i dare or do i dare? (faye_dartmouth)
Posted at: July 5th, 2012 12:05 pm (UTC)
stephen cutter sit

Stephen brings that out in my writing.

Thanks!

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