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Primeval drabble: An Invitation (Kept verse)

March 11th, 2013 (08:34 pm)
sad

feeling: sad

Title: An Invitation

Disclaimer: I do not own Primeval.

A/N: Next in the Kept drabble series.

Summary: It was an invitation; Helen had always been so hard to resist.



-o-

Stephen had worked hard to get here. Helen had taken so much; getting anything back had almost cost Stephen everything.

He had her now. At gunpoint, on the floor -- the anomaly behind her. He could make a lunge for it, but he knew her -- he’d be on the ground before he got there. He couldn’t give up, though. Not now.

Yet, the idea of it made him feel sick as a dog.

Over my dead body.

It was an invitation; Helen had always been so hard to resist.

And his finger itched on the trigger, begging for release.

Comments

Posted by: 47eleven (47eleven)
Posted at: March 12th, 2013 02:10 am (UTC)
Party Primeval

Nicely tense.

Posted by: do i dare or do i dare? (faye_dartmouth)
Posted at: March 19th, 2013 01:24 am (UTC)
stephen happy

Thank you :)

Posted by: Lena7142 (lena7142)
Posted at: March 12th, 2013 03:40 am (UTC)
stephen

Dammit, Stephen, quit being such a boy scout...

Posted by: do i dare or do i dare? (faye_dartmouth)
Posted at: March 19th, 2013 01:25 am (UTC)
stephen shocked

But he's such an adorable boy scout.

Thank you :)

Posted by: kristen_mara (kristen_mara)
Posted at: March 12th, 2013 07:30 am (UTC)
Stephen Clouds


AaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaAAAaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa! Even when Stephen has the upper hand, he doesn't!

It must be so tempting to want to try for a leg shot...


Posted by: do i dare or do i dare? (faye_dartmouth)
Posted at: March 19th, 2013 01:25 am (UTC)
stephen angsty

LOL, Stephen has his weaknesses, mostly those named Cutter.

Thank you :)

Posted by: freddiejoey (freddiejoey)
Posted at: March 12th, 2013 11:37 am (UTC)
Stephen Pri

*starts to seriously worry*

Posted by: do i dare or do i dare? (faye_dartmouth)
Posted at: March 19th, 2013 01:26 am (UTC)
stephen cutter distance

It may be time to worry..

Thank you :)

Posted by: nietie (nietie)
Posted at: March 12th, 2013 01:25 pm (UTC)
Eek!

Eep! Good luck, Stephen, with whatever you decide.

Posted by: do i dare or do i dare? (faye_dartmouth)
Posted at: March 19th, 2013 01:26 am (UTC)
stephen goodbye

He'll need the luck. Thank you :)

Posted by: she was a work in progress. (dreamer_98)
Posted at: March 12th, 2013 02:42 pm (UTC)
primeval: abby

Gah! The suspense is killing me! (Although not as much as Stephen, I'm sure).

Posted by: do i dare or do i dare? (faye_dartmouth)
Posted at: March 19th, 2013 01:27 am (UTC)
stephen broken

LOL I am glad it's keeping your interest. Thank you :)

Posted by: athene (deinonychus_1)
Posted at: March 12th, 2013 07:35 pm (UTC)
stephen

Do something quickly, Stephen!

Posted by: do i dare or do i dare? (faye_dartmouth)
Posted at: March 19th, 2013 01:27 am (UTC)
stephen cutter sit

He would move faster if not for the 100 word limit! Thanks.

Posted by: knitekat (knitekat)
Posted at: March 12th, 2013 09:22 pm (UTC)

Eek! Do something, Stephen.

Posted by: do i dare or do i dare? (faye_dartmouth)
Posted at: March 19th, 2013 01:28 am (UTC)
stephen cutter

He's getting there...

Thank you :)

Posted by: Cordelia Delayne (cordeliadelayne)
Posted at: March 13th, 2013 12:11 am (UTC)
[primeval] anomalies

Eek, very tense!

Posted by: do i dare or do i dare? (faye_dartmouth)
Posted at: March 19th, 2013 01:28 am (UTC)
stephen goodbye

Thank you :)

Posted by: joshinator (joshinator)
Posted at: March 13th, 2013 04:28 am (UTC)
Stephen Oh Yeah

Get going Stephen!!!!

Posted by: do i dare or do i dare? (faye_dartmouth)
Posted at: March 19th, 2013 01:29 am (UTC)
stephen happy

Thank you :)

Posted by: sophie_deangirl (sophie_deangirl)
Posted at: March 13th, 2013 03:30 pm (UTC)
So palpable

I love how your words just brings out how palpable Stephen's struggle is. You can FEEL it yourself and there's a part of you that's saying "do it" and yet you can understand his hesitation. His fatal flaw has always been Helen, it drove him to all the wrong decisions and to all his losses and yet, his morality and his misguided yet ever-present love for her won't let him end her, because he fears that maybe it won't end for him even if he does.

Fave Part:

Stephen had worked hard to get here. Helen had taken so much; getting anything back had almost cost Stephen everything.

--the struggle is right there. AWESOME!

Posted by: do i dare or do i dare? (faye_dartmouth)
Posted at: March 19th, 2013 01:29 am (UTC)
Re: So palpable
stephen sad

I adore Stephen's angst. He does it so well.

Thank you :)

Posted by: fredbassett (fredbassett)
Posted at: March 14th, 2013 10:22 pm (UTC)

I think Stephen is too much of a boy scout to pull that trigger.

Posted by: do i dare or do i dare? (faye_dartmouth)
Posted at: March 19th, 2013 01:31 am (UTC)
stephen cutter sit

I'm afraid you may be right.

Thank you :)

Posted by: lsellersfic (lsellersfic)
Posted at: March 15th, 2013 10:24 am (UTC)
Primeval:Helen/Stephen

Shoot her kneecaps!! She won't be following you then!!!

Posted by: do i dare or do i dare? (faye_dartmouth)
Posted at: March 19th, 2013 01:31 am (UTC)
stephen goodbye

LOL good point. Stephen doesn't think clearly around her though.

Thank you :)

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